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Life and a Lady

A little girl,
With pastel stains on her cheeks
I remember so vaguely
But she walked home that day
With a star in her hands
And chocolate milk on her mind

A little lady,
With confetti littered in her cheeks
I remember, though barely
But she walked home that day
With a medal in her hands
And the promised computer in mind

A teenage girl,
With tears on her cheeks
I remember somewhat clearly
But she walked home that day
With a toga in hand
And college in her mind

A grown-up lady,
With make-up on her cheeks
I remember lucidly
And she walked home that day
With a diploma in hand
And success in her mind

A woman,
With blush on her cheeks
I remember so vividly
And she walked home that day
With a ring in her hand
And a man in her mind

A bride,
With bloom on her cheeks
I’ll remember infinitely
Walked to a new home that day
With a hand in her hand
And eternity in her mind

A mother,
With small hands on her cheeks
I’ll remember joyfully
And she walked home that day
With a new life in her hand
And the sweetest duty in her mind

An old lady
With wrinkles on her cheeks
I remember with difficulty
Though she can’t walk home today
Without help in her hand
And the past in her mind…

And a soul,
With no flesh on her cheeks
A life to remember vaguely
No home to walk to
Without life in her hands
And yearnings on her mind.
Its the way I looked at life when I was younger, and even though the future is ever unclear, it is the way I imagine it to be... one day.
I am bad at free verse, but I just had to express this, I'm sorry for the bad free verse, I'm still practicing. I wanna get better. :)
have a nice day, feel free to leave comments, it would help me a lot.
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:icontommyboywood:
tommyboywood Jan 31, 2014  Professional Writer
very nice.  reminds me of mine "All our yesterdays."  but I like yours better
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Ohreemamma Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thanks~ but i bet yours is nice to... :)

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FallenArchetype Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is....... Mindblowing QuQ Fantastic. Magnificent. Perfect.
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:iconctndu2:
I love your imagery, i have no idea how you can call this bad free-verse!! this is the type of stuff that inspires me not only to keep writing to write better!! it's beautiful, glad i came across it, love, love, love it
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Ohreemamma Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
T.T thanks for appreciating my poetry! thanks, thanks, thanks very much!
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BlackSilhoutte Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That was amazing..
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Ohreemamma Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you. 
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:iconlostinmyownlife:
Beautiful. Just beautiful. 
I wish I wrote as well as this.
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Ohreemamma Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
gosh, please, i'm just an amateur poet. this is well... i guess my third or second free verse poem... and yeah, i still am in a state of shock over the positive response. i guess we're on the same page... but thank you so much for appreciating my work! let's go poetry!
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:iconxbunnybunz:
This was absolutely wonderful. /claps/
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