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Life and a Lady

A little girl,
With pastel stains on her cheeks
I remember so vaguely
But she walked home that day
With a star in her hands
And chocolate milk on her mind

A little lady,
With confetti littered in her cheeks
I remember, though barely
But she walked home that day
With a medal in her hands
And the promised computer in mind

A teenage girl,
With tears on her cheeks
I remember somewhat clearly
But she walked home that day
With a toga in hand
And college in her mind

A grown-up lady,
With make-up on her cheeks
I remember lucidly
And she walked home that day
With a diploma in hand
And success in her mind

A woman,
With blush on her cheeks
I remember so vividly
And she walked home that day
With a ring in her hand
And a man in her mind

A bride,
With bloom on her cheeks
I’ll remember infinitely
Walked to a new home that day
With a hand in her hand
And eternity in her mind

A mother,
With small hands on her cheeks
I’ll remember joyfully
And she walked home that day
With a new life in her hand
And the sweetest duty in her mind

An old lady
With wrinkles on her cheeks
I remember with difficulty
Though she can’t walk home today
Without help in her hand
And the past in her mind…

And a soul,
With no flesh on her cheeks
A life to remember vaguely
No home to walk to
Without life in her hands
And yearnings on her mind.
Its the way I looked at life when I was younger, and even though the future is ever unclear, it is the way I imagine it to be... one day.
I am bad at free verse, but I just had to express this, I'm sorry for the bad free verse, I'm still practicing. I wanna get better. :)
have a nice day, feel free to leave comments, it would help me a lot.
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:iconshep4life:
shep4life Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow I can see why this is so popular...quite amazing really
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:iconohreemamma:
Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
just a hit and run with inspiration. i don't think i can even pull it off again. T.T  hehe but thanks!
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's cool when it happens though
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
riiight hehehe very.
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
very nice.  reminds me of mine "All our yesterdays."  but I like yours better
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thanks~ but i bet yours is nice to... :)

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FallenArchetype Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is....... Mindblowing QuQ Fantastic. Magnificent. Perfect.
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ctndu2 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013
I love your imagery, i have no idea how you can call this bad free-verse!! this is the type of stuff that inspires me not only to keep writing to write better!! it's beautiful, glad i came across it, love, love, love it
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
T.T thanks for appreciating my poetry! thanks, thanks, thanks very much!
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BlackSilhoutte Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That was amazing..
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you. 
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LostInMyOwnLife Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013
Beautiful. Just beautiful. 
I wish I wrote as well as this.
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
gosh, please, i'm just an amateur poet. this is well... i guess my third or second free verse poem... and yeah, i still am in a state of shock over the positive response. i guess we're on the same page... but thank you so much for appreciating my work! let's go poetry!
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XBunnybunz Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013
This was absolutely wonderful. /claps/
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wooh! thank you very much!!! (bow) (bow)
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Raven2043 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This made me think of some one I lost a few years ago and things I hadn't thought of in a long time..in the end it brought tears to my eyes...thank you.
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i'm sorry for your loss. and you even shed tears! what could make a poet happier? :)
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Sagittarius14 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Student Interface Designer
This is beautiful...
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i am very grateful you think so.
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DeTIX Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This is very nice!!! Keep up your goHuggle!od work! Like this!!
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks! i will! through more practice. i hope the inspirations come to me~~
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Tobassinesia Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013
This made me smile, and then it made me consider crying. Thank you for practicing your free verse with this awesomeness, ahhk... T~T
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahwww... i'll do more practice and get a lot better, look forward to it! :) thanks for the nice comment!
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Xia-Kyandy Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
beautiful
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
and so are you. (bows) thanks very much!
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BellaGBear Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is actually very good so don't worry. I love how you kept the poem interesting by using different ways of remembering each time. (also that told a story I know)

Since it is your view on live I can not real comment on the things you said, but I think it is a shame the last two verses are negative. The others are so hopefull and made me smile. The last two verses kinda felt out of places as well because they were negative. I can not believe live will end badly. Certainly not when you went to life so positive. But that is only my opinon.
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks for your sensible comment on my poem! yeah, but that's reality right? women grow old and die. should i have portrayed it in some other way? i took the beginning until the middle form reality, the marriage and being a mother on my hopes, and the final two on my conceptions about how life ends... :) 
there are many things i still don't know on women's lives and the realities in it, but i completely wrote the poems on how i felt it should be written. :) every woman is a story, and i wrote mine. 
:) thanks for finding my poem lovely. 
have a nice day!!
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BellaGBear Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yes it is very good you write it like you feel it is. 

I only refuse to believe life ends and gets worse when you are old. I have seen a lot of different old people. Some sad because they are and some very positive. When I grow old I want to belong to the latest group. Life is what you make of it I hope. And how positive you experience life depends on your outlook for a great part.

I hope you have a wonderfull life :D

and no problem. It truly was a lovely poem. Maked me feel farm and fuzzy inside like live is oke and nice :)
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i think i should have a better outlook in life huh? thanks! keep on being positive and you'll see great things happen to your life!
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BellaGBear Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I hope :) Yeah I truly believe being positive helps to have a positive life
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks for your sensible comment on my poem! yeah, but that's reality right? women grow old and die. should i have portrayed it in some other way? i took the beginning until the middle form reality, the marriage and being a mother on my hopes, and the final two on my conceptions about how life ends... :) 
there are many things i still don't know on women's lives and the realities in it, but i completely wrote the poems on how i felt it should be written. :) every woman is a story, and i wrote mine. 
:) thanks for finding my poem lovely. 
have a nice day!!
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thegirlfromindonesia Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013
okay, okay, so. I don't know how to express the beauty of this poem in text.. It's just so creative and absolutely beautiful!!! I just completely love the way you wrote it; starting from a little girl to a soul. I also love how everything changed gradually--all the "on her cheeks...walked home...in her hand(s)...in her mind"
Anyway I think this is one of your best poems ever!!! :D It's stunningly lovely :iconluvluvplz:
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yeah, that's basically the form i took on, i basically don't know many forms of poetry. in free verse, all the more. they say anything and everything goes but.... i need guidance, some kind of reference... i didn't expect it would be this "good"... T.T guess i'll have to practice more! :)
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sweetangel-babycakes Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i love this out of all your poems and i don't know why. It sort of gives that creepy awesome feeling. Like... it has this vivid imagery :)
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
creepy awesome feeling? talaga?!!! wow thanks... and you... only you have the idea how i... i wok hard for this. you know me in real life, so i guess i have to take your word for it. don't you have a taste for my rhymes and lyrics? :3

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sweetangel-babycakes Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yup tologo :)
Rhymes are okay......
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Tapunyr Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Professional Writer
Such a beautiful piece of poetry.  It made my chest ache, especially as I am a mother and your use of the words 'joyfully' and 'sweetness' instantly struck a chord inside me.  That's what the best poetry does.  Please don't say that you're bad at free verse, this was just right, and the whole piece not too long.  This is a fave for me!  Love    +fav  
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, ma'am... :) for your kind words. i am not a mother yet, but i am glad i managed to convey the necessary emotions and words. 
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Tapunyr Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Professional Writer
You are most welcome.  :) (Smile) 
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KinimiHucashi Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013
I love the imagery you used :) Good job :D :iconlabradorplz:
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks, cute puppy!! thanks.... XD
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Vivacia18 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013
Beautifully written love:heart: If this is just the beginning for you, I'm very excited to see how you will grow as a writer:meow:
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
aww you flatter me. thank you very much for the comment, fave and watch. :)
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Vivacia18 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013
:hug:
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Eve-Elysion Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This brought tears to my eyes. :')
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
smile now. :) 
i'm glad to have stirred those feelings from you.
thank you for commenting! 
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Eve-Elysion Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome, keep coming with these inspirational works. :)
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The-Shifty-Lion Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. Just wow. Amazingly beautiful.
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Ohreemamma Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
hi shifty-lion-sama! aww, thanks! thanks for always supporting my poems! :))) 
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